This essay was written by my 11 years old boy and rated Awesome.My son got 30/30 marks.I hope this will help you to get some points to improve playground..
Power Upper Elementary’s playground needs a few improvements. The first improvement would be to reduce the height of the ropes and the playground structure.. Another would be to coat the poles in rubber. The final improvement would be to replace the wood chips with rubber. I believe that every playground should be safe for children to play on.
The first improvement would be to reduce the height of the ropes and the playground structure because if someone were to jump off at that height then they would be injured. Also sometimes short children would like to play on the playground structure and ropes so the height of the playground structure and ropes should reduce by about two feet.
The second improvement would be to coat the poles with about two inches of rubber so if someone were to hit any part of their body on the pole it would not hurt as much. Also it would provide a better grip o the poles so no one would fall or get hurt.
The final improvement would be to replace the wood chips with rubber because sometimes when it rains children slip on the wood chips and fall onto the mud. Another reason that the wood chips should be replaced with rubber is because if someone were to fall wood chips come into their shoe. If there was rubber instead of wood chips then fewer children would fall.
I believe every playground should be safe for children to play on. The playground of Power could use a few more improvements, but these are the major improvements that could be needed to make Power’s playground a safe place for everyone to play on and have fun.